Fluff is your enemy! The kind of fluff I am referring to here, is the overly long copywriting, which takes your powerful marketing message and dilutes it into something weak and uninspiring.
To be or not to be?
When I started studying copywriting back in the 1980′s, one of the first lessons I learned was the importance of brevity. Keep it short and simple. When Shakespeare wrote his final work, after decades spent writing thousands and thousands of words in longhand, I wonder if he knew that his most famous quote would contain just 6 words and that they would each contain 3 letters or less?
“To be or not to be.” Short. Powerful. Easy to remember. Perfect!
As a copywriter, I know that the sooner I can make a point, the more likely it is that people will read it. People are super-busy these days, with little time to wade through acres of vague, pedestrian copy. If I can get the value of a 1000 word post into 400 words, I know I have achieved something. I will have taken 1000 words worth of value and concentrated them into a powerful and compelling 400 word marketing message (or blog post / landing page etc.)
How can fluff be killing your business?
In order for you to generate inquiries or sales, your marketing copy must motivate people to take some kind of action; click a link, email you, subscribe to your newsletter or call you etc. Most small business marketing has horribly poor conversion rates. It’s vague. It often rambles and usually tries to achieve too many different things at once.
If you want to see an immediate, measurable improvement in your marketing response rates, learn to de-fluff your copy. Make each piece of copy, direct the reader to do one thing and don’t deviate.
Do you see that simple 2 sentence box below this post? (If you read this via email, click here.) Those 2 sentences generate thousands of page views every week. Here’s why:
- The message is focused exclusively on just 1 service.
- It is aimed exclusively at just 1 group of my readers.
- It asks you to do just 1 thing.
Short, targeted messages work. You want proof? I know, with 98% certainty, that you are a business owner or entrepreneur. No, I can’t see you from here, but that’s who THIS blog is aimed at and as a result, I have a highly focused readership of great people.
Take a look at your marketing copy. Check every place, where you use words as a way to communicate with your perspective clients. Is each message focused on just one outcome? Is each message trying to appeal to everyone or are they focused like a laser-beam on your target market?
In short: Cut the fluff!
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Jim Connolly
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January 28, 2011 at 11:55
Hi Jim, I work a lot with small business owners and the importance of good copywriting is one of the main things I’m always stressing.
I see too many websites that focus on the company rather than the potential customer and as you rightly say they tend to ramble on.
I’ve seen dozens of homepages that read more like a detailed history of the company rather than getting the benefits across to the target audience.
Your post made me think of a TV show I saw the other night about customer service in furniture shops. There was one company that had a range of different discounts depending on what you bought and how many items you chose. The end result was that it was very confusing for the customer and put them off.
January 28, 2011 at 16:48
Thanks for the feedback Jamie.
Completely agree with your observation;
“too many websites that focus on the company rather than the potential customer”
I see that so much. I sense a future post topic!
January 28, 2011 at 12:48
Very nice! I’ve gone on for years about not fluffing up posts and pages…it was actually the basis of my Headway Hub revamp a few months ago. You should always strive to get your point across clearly and easily.
January 28, 2011 at 16:50
Hi Corey.
What’s added to the deluge of fluff, is seo gurus telling people that they MUST pack the pages with words. Equally, people use the old pinch-page format, with acres of sprawling copy, (and yellow highlighter, of course).
January 28, 2011 at 13:41
This post has got me thinking about how I want to run my future business and maybe how it should be named.
Thanks for sharing as always Jim!
January 28, 2011 at 13:52
I hate fluff. It gets everywhere, clogs up the works, attracts more fluff and makes the place look dirty.
…just remove the fluff.
January 28, 2011 at 13:58
Fuff attracts fluff – LOVE that Justin.
January 28, 2011 at 15:24
Hi there. Fluff is indeed frustrating in posts and copy. No-one has much time (certainly not business owners) and getting their attention and drawing them to the key messages as quickly as possible is key.
Takes practice though I think. Especially on blog posts. Finish it, read it, read it again, strip out the excess, read it again… It can take time, but does come with practice!
Starting to fluff – “over and out”
January 28, 2011 at 16:44
Hi Barney. You’re right, it is a great deal easier to get a point across in 500 words, than to get that same point across in just 50 words. Part of the skillset of all great marketing copywriters, is brevity.
I think Twitter is helping a lot of small business owners with this. It forces people to really focus on getting a message across in a limited number of words / characters.
January 28, 2011 at 15:37
Yes, Jim Connlolly the ‘FLUFF’ I know I have a bit around me hopefully I learn enough to get raid of it..
Thank You for the pointers too loved this article…
January 28, 2011 at 16:46
Glad you found it useful, Norman.
January 28, 2011 at 20:10
I LIKE SHORT
January 28, 2011 at 20:22
Ditto!
January 28, 2011 at 22:57
I edited down a guest post last night from 900 words to under 600 so this post is quite timely for me. It is amazing how much “fluff” we can remove and still say what needs to be said.
I prefer short and to the point, besides we want to leave room for things to “discover” via comments and conversation right?
January 28, 2011 at 23:11
To paraphrase a song I seem to remember
Nice one Jimmy
Nice one son
Nice one Jimmy
Let’s have another one
January 29, 2011 at 21:23
I’ve never been sung to on the blog before . Thanks Dan!!
January 29, 2011 at 19:51
Cutting through the clutter….yes indeed! Nothing drives me more than being asked to write a commercial message with a client’s expectation of a laundry list of details about what they do and not a clear concise message of what they will do for their customers. Too many small businesses are in business in spite of themselves!
January 30, 2011 at 17:49
I agree, but now I’m hungry! We have a lot of internal debates over length and copy. For the guest bloggers, we limit them to 500 words and, for some, this causes great pain (hence the internal debate). Next time, I’ll just send them this blog post so it’s not me saying it.
January 30, 2011 at 20:02
Hi Gini. I fully understand people writing longer posts, it’s easier and quicker than condensing our thoughts into a shorter piece. That 500 word limit is, in my opinion, a great length.
Thanks for stopping by the blog my friend!
January 30, 2011 at 20:04
It’s a great point because we typically write with extraneous words. I had a boss when I graduated from college that would force us to remove 90 percent of our words to see if the meaning was still there. Then we were allowed to slowly add back in. It works!
January 30, 2011 at 20:08
Sounds like another blog post Gini.
January 30, 2011 at 20:09
Great idea!!